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Far away,
Across the sea,
Is something we ignore.
Something big,
Something important,
But we turn our heads away.
We hear about it,
See it around us,
But we do not lift a finger.
And do we care?
Of course we do,
But we’re happier to ignore.
The poverty,
The starvation,
The lives that end so fast.
Here in our safe little world,
We do not need to notice,
We do not need to care.
But we should.
Across the sea,
Is something we ignore.
Something big,
Something important,
But we turn our heads away.
We hear about it,
See it around us,
But we do not lift a finger.
And do we care?
Of course we do,
But we’re happier to ignore.
The poverty,
The starvation,
The lives that end so fast.
Here in our safe little world,
We do not need to notice,
We do not need to care.
But we should.
Literature
Broken Heart
Do you love?
Do you hate?
Do you stop to appreciate?
The feelings someone has for you?
The things that keep you from being blue?
Have you loved?
Have you lost?
Have you tried no matter what the cost?
Do you love her?
Does she love you?
Will you ever find out if it is true?
Have you loved while taking hate?
Is it she who doesn't appreciate?
Are you lost?
Are you confused?
Is it all leaving your heart bruised?
Is it real?
Is it faking?
Is it my heart that's slowly breaking?
Does it hurt?
Does it kill?
Does it make you never want to heal?
A broken heart is a great deal.
A broken heart may never heal.
Literature
Broken
My wounds wont heal
I scream into the darkness
no emotions inside left to feel
just when I thought I could trust you
Literature
broken
Her words are meaningless just like her life
it's always been about the pain, it's always been about the strife
She calls his name out from the dark
Her heart is dead, he left his mark
She screams out loud to soften the pain
Her tears they come, like falling rain
The notes she writes, he tears apart
He abandoned her there, and stole her heart
She feels so used, so broken, so bent
All the words he told her, he never meant
She lies awake and wonders why
She crosses her heart and hopes to die
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Could someone please critique this? I feel that there is something wrong with it, but i don't know how to fix it...
An attempt at writing a poem about the poverty in third world countries and our ignorance of it..
An attempt at writing a poem about the poverty in third world countries and our ignorance of it..
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I like it. 
I think it's really good. I don't see much wrong with it..... but if the fact that the last bit's only one line's bothering you, maybe you could extend it to something like:
But we really should,
Because the proof of poverty,
Is right in front of our faces.
But hey, I dunno. It's up to you.. if u know at least which bit, like which stanza, maybe then we can help better. Still, great job my friend.
I think it's really good. I don't see much wrong with it..... but if the fact that the last bit's only one line's bothering you, maybe you could extend it to something like:But we really should,
Because the proof of poverty,
Is right in front of our faces.
But hey, I dunno. It's up to you.. if u know at least which bit, like which stanza, maybe then we can help better. Still, great job my friend.